PaTWiBaP

[patis]

I remember my Comm I class back in college: there was this exercise in writing poems. The teacher discussed an article on writing bad poems. Well, if you follow the format then it is bound to sound terrible. But the writer was hopeful that it would at least plant a poetic seed in the writer and will soon bloom into a good poet.

I forgot what the author's template was, and years of trying to recall ended up in vain. So I decided to come up with my own (just say thanks and mention my name and this site if you find it useful :D).

It's only four lines short (or long, if you want to be metaphysical about it). Here goes The "patis template to writing bad poems" or PaTWiBaP:

Line 1: write a short declarative sentence.
Line 2: write a yes/no question.
Line 3: write a figure of speech (metaphor, simile, etc) alluding to nature. End with a comma.
Line 4: write a promise for the future.

Tip: Don't use words more than two syllables long. You want to write, not thumb the dictionary or rack your brains out.

Let's try an example:

I like apples.
Aren't they good?
Fiery red and a crunchy shell,
I will have more tomorrow.

Why don't you try it and have fun? Perhaps you can help me tweak my poem template prototype?

[trailblazerstravelntours]

I remember my Comm I class back in college: there was this exercise in writing poems. The teacher discussed an article on writing bad poems. Well, if you follow the format then it is bound to sound terrible. But the writer was hopeful that it would at least plant a poetic seed in the writer and will soon bloom into a good poet.

I forgot what the author's template was, and years of trying to recall ended up in vain. So I decided to come up with my own (just say thanks and mention my name and this site if you find it useful :D).

It's only four lines short (or long, if you want to be metaphysical about it). Here goes The "patis template to writing bad poems" or PaTWiBaP:

Line 1: write a short declarative sentence.
Line 2: write a yes/no question.
Line 3: write a figure of speech (metaphor, simile, etc) alluding to nature. End with a comma.
Line 4: write a promise for the future.

Tip: Don't use words more than two syllables long. You want to write, not thumb the dictionary or rack your brains out.

Let's try an example:

I like apples.
Aren't they good?
Fiery red and a crunchy shell,
I will have more tomorrow.

Why don't you try it and have fun? Perhaps you can help me tweak my poem template prototype?

HaHa! Patis, nice one. The first 3 lines are definitely terrible and shallow and the last line is irritating! Hehehe! :glitterlol:

[patis]

HaHa! Patis, nice one. The first 3 lines are definitely terrible and shallow and the last line is irritating! Hehehe! :glitterlol:

Thanks for the comment, trailblazers. (sidenote: Admin, can you give this user the power to change her name once? It's too cumbersome to write! LOL)

Why don't you try it? Maybe you can come up with a good sounding poem out of the muck. Or better yet, hopefully this will entice you to become a good poet yourself.

[ctivnan]

Can I try? I'm no poet, so I hope that these steps will help me. I have this bad habit of concentrating on the language form instead of the beauty whenever I attempt to write a poem. :coffee1:

I am in a study mode.
Does it really have to be this overwhelming?
The pile's growing as high as a mountain.
Yet, challenges are meant to be faced head on.

:superhappy: :DANCER: :superhappy:

What do you think Patis?

[patis]

Can I try? I'm no poet, so I hope that these steps will help me. I have this bad habit of concentrating on the language form instead of the beauty whenever I attempt to write a poem. :coffee1:

I am in a study mode.
Does it really have to be this overwhelming?
The pile's growing as high as a mountain.
Yet, challenges are meant to be faced head on.

:superhappy: :DANCER: :superhappy:

What do you think Patis?

Excellent! That wasn't hard at all, was it? I hope it planted a poetic seed in you. Then you'll add more amazing stuff to the world!

(I'm glad that you recognize that language, in whatever form, is meant to be enjoyed. As everything in life.)

[bittersweetenn]

i need him back
do u think it's necessary?
our past it like a broken dream,
but i wish... or maybe, ill just keep on dreaming....



(hey patis, thanx for the ym... hehe btw, i couldn't think any better idea...i have this trash thought of mine... hehe)

[trailblazerstravelntours]

Thanks for the comment, trailblazers. (sidenote: Admin, can you give this user the power to change her name once? It's too cumbersome to write! LOL)


Hey, trail's fine. Whoever said I'd want to change my name? Hehehe! It's the perfect name for me. :DANCER:


Why don't you try it? Maybe you can come up with a good sounding poem out of the muck. Or better yet, hopefully this will entice you to become a good poet yourself.

Ok. I'll give it a shot, patis... Brace yourself. hehehe!

Rain is refreshing.
Would you like some raindrops to sip?
Mighty like the ocean,
I'll wait for the next tippy-tap-pit-tip.

Hahaha!!! Loved doing this!

:rain::rain::rain:

:summer::summer::summer:

:superhappy::superhappy::superhappy:

[patis]

i need him back
do u think it's necessary?
our past it like a broken dream,
but i wish... or maybe, ill just keep on dreaming....


Ah love. To feel it, requited or otherwise, puts one in an ever tender bliss.

That's quite a nice poem you got bittersweetenn.

[patis]

Ok. I'll give it a shot, patis... Brace yourself. hehehe!

Rain is refreshing.
Would you like some raindrops to sip?
Mighty like the ocean,
I'll wait for the next tippy-tap-pit-tip.

Hahaha!!! Loved doing this!





Wow that's amazing! I must confess I never imagined raindrops being sipped. I LOLed at the tippy-tap-pit-tip. Good one, trail.

Hey, why don't the rest of you try it at least once? :D

[bittersweetenn]

Ah love. To feel it, requited or otherwise, puts one in an ever tender bliss.

That's quite a nice poem you got bittersweetenn.

:superhappy:thanks patis... heheh :callme:

[pinoypower]

This is what I churned out when I followed your rules:

Roses are red.
Are violets blue?
Like the sky up above,
I will reach for you.

Isn't it awful?:ashamed: Maybe I should have some inspiration to come up with a better one?:emoticon-5: