which way?

[patty]

Stars would fall
and memories would fade.
It's hard to trust
when everything won't last.
* * *
We are the sunlight
- shining too bright, too bright!
- in the continuous rain
on the fallen Byzantine.

You are my Mark Antony
in this dark surreal mystery
- the coldest of May
and my night during the day.

You are that lost beat,
the candle wick to be lit,
but - but you are the Aegean
the Aegean that didn't wait.

when I'm with you:
I'm just a child
wanting to run to your side...
spending each quiet time
like melody without rhyme
I am just Tinkerbell
in Peter Pan's travel;
the wishes that fly
only 'til half the sky


If Cupid had a gun
and we can't run away - run!
and mortals could fly
and mortals could never die... never die.

[patis]

Please tell me you're the one who wrote this. This is marvelous.
Patty, the world needs culture. You're the one who'll help supply it. Keep on writing. I will, too.

cheers,
patis

[patty]

thanks...
wow. somebody liked my writing. haha.

thanks for criticizing, too. i really need coherence. but i don't know...
they're kind of 'metaphor,' aren't they?

they're confusing me. haha.

i've got things to learn.